Surviving as a Broken Hero

Too much exposition in the beginning. Other than that the premise is still fresh and could be polished further

This had some potential but author screwed it up with a completely nonsensical magic system and world building that suffered because of it.

Writing quality is good and easily understandable, story development is good and so far the character is looking promising and world background has not been mentioned much yet hope its also good and i suggest everyone whether a kid or elder or young give it a read as its looking good so far if you don't mind it having only 1 chapter

Here I go giving my own novel a 5-Star review again...;) Desolate Fate is a rebranded/polished/reuploaded version of my first novel, A Desolate Life, which has four released volumes. Most of my readers have told me that the novel gets better and better as it goes along, and the feedback from the end of volume 4 was amazing. Rewriting the novel should fix all of the minor issues some people had with the earlier chapters. This is a dark novel. It is tragic, grim, and shows the darker side not only of the cultivation world, but of life as a whole. The protagonist starts off as a naive young kid, but he gradually changes throughout the novel as he experiences more of the world and comes to realise that his life is not as mundane as he had once believed... I gave this novel the anti-hero AND villain tags for a reason - the protagonist changes. He is not outright good, he is not outright evil. At times he clings to morality, at times he becomes a villain in the eyes of everyone around him. If you want to read a dark, serious, somewhat philosophical cultivation novel, with plot-twists, and a main character who experiences both success and failure, then this is the novel for you. A have a solid plan for this novel, in terms of world building, character development, and many crucial plot points. To my old readers who are here to read again - welcome back! To my new readers - welcome! I hope you'll give this novel a chance, because I am committed to seeing it through.

"Itachi may have a point, if we travelled more directly and dealt with threats more effectively we would spend less time between islands and would probably save money on supplies" Nami sighed as she pondered on all the money she could of saved.

"C-Catrina?!"

"What way?"

"So, you are the ones responsible of annihilating my men?" asked him with a deep but composed voice.